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// ﻿ ﻿ if i had to pick a person to come motivate students to do the better in school would be. Mr.Boll because he his a moivating and in encouraging person.And alot of students like him and listen very well to hiim. Plus some kids understand what he talks about so i think student will make a connection with us.So every one can know how much we got to do better on test and other stuff and what ever else he talks about. Then Mr.Boll will be ble to tell the student how if the teachers see that your trying they will be more encourage to help you with your problems and other stuff kids need help with.And Mr.Boll knows how to keep people on track.and this is who i would like to come and speak to us and why.//

//Yesterday i want outside to tunner park to play basketball with lewis and dom the were beating on me intell i got the ball and started making all my shots in tell it got to cold i started folding and missing my shots in tell i got out and got m hands warm because dom tip me out and i got back in and tipped lewis and dom out lewis got mad and atarted tipping every shot that was missed so dom just started playin around after he beat us 3 times in 3o-3 so i got 4real so i can get some more winns but lewis and dom wasn't with i so i keep losin with lewis having 3-wins and me having 1-wins dom with 4-wins more people came to play and they were scoring and scoring so i tried to keep scoring and got tip 3 times by lewis and got out the game for good and had to wait in tell next game to get in so next game start ever one was tired of getting out so we played a game with no tipps so i scored 4 pionts from the start and then every one start scoring more pionts on me because i couldn't mak a shot i mssed like 12 shots in a row so i just started taking my time wit me shot because it was 30 - 29 -27- 3o so i came back to lose by 2 at night in the dark because my mom called and i had to leave.//

Good job with the description Ksaun. Make sure that as you are writing, you are thinking about sentence structure. In your first paragraph about the motivational speaker, you did a good job at adding periods and avoiding run-on sentences. You did less of that in the second paragraph. You did do a really good job at describing the game. It feels like I was there, which is what you want in description. Keep writing man.

As the playoff draws closer more and more updates come to mind about whos going to win the championship. I beleive the second year player mvp of the NBA and rookie of the year. //D.rose will take the Bulls to the campionship and win.the ablities that D.rose has to get in the paint in score as little as he is. And his 3pt jump shot ablity And the way he gets his teammates the ball so they can score The chances are fearly high of them winning because they are ahead of the rest of the team with rank #1 in the NBA. Before the play off and the only team i think they have to worry about is the thunder because the have a team full of young players that have good game. And the heat because i feel like they been playin around for the regular season from just doing ally hoops and other stuff and the Lakers because they have kobe and he makes any shot grauded or ungrauded. but the bulls still have good D so they suold be able to handle those teams but this is all the info i have on the bulls wining for now.// Ok Ksaun. Good start. Let break this down a little. I see your thesis as something like this. "The bulls will win the championship this year becuase they have Derek Rose and he will lead them to win it all. He is not alone though. They also have a good defense that will help them in the playoffs.

That should go in your first paragraph, and some of the details about D-rose should be moved down to the second paragraph. The second paragraph should be about D-rose... he is a great player, can shoot threes, can drive and pass well to set up his teammates etc. Does this make sense. Then, you should have a paragraph describing the good defense of the bulls. Then, you should have a paragraph describing the main challengers to their title run. (heat and thunder) This will mean that some of the information you have above will be moved to one of these paragraphs below. Your first paragraph will be shorter than it is now, but the paper will be more organized. I can help you with this. Shout me out in class. Good work

Ksaun- You did a good job with the first two assignments. You can be a good writer. I would like to help you a little with some of your organization. Make sure you talk to me in class and I might be able to help you with some of this. Keep working hard.

i th ﻿ ink there should be a holiday for basketball because basketball is a fun sport and alot of people play basketball all over the world but during this holiday people will have basketball tournment all over the world and have different NBA stars come to there home towns to give tips and play a couple games and take pictures with people then all u can eat food places will be free to get in then there will be a time for adults to have there fun


 * i think uconn is the best team in NCAA basketball
 * because the won they won march madness and you have to be a good team to make it all the way to the to the end of march madness
 * then they had the best player in the NCAA kemba walker and he can get any thing in the paint
 * and they wear my favorite color

Today I was walking down the street. Alone street light on sun not shinning close to 1:00. Who wow what was that i look right i look left nothing. In sight then i felt heat on my neck as is a big animal breathing on my neck. As if i was in then cage with a rino huffin and puffing ready to charge at me from the back side. Then the breathing stop every time i tried to see whats happeneing it would stop. So i started to run like i had a dog trying to see how i taste. Then i herd somethig behind me looked back as i was still runnig i saw a big bear behind me. Then i started to run even faster as a jagury was running after me as i run and run for hours The clock hits 3:00 mom calls to see if im ok answer the phone butt get no reply. So i hang up. As i hopped right over a fence think every thing is ok The bear strikes it misses luckly it didnt hit me. Then i keep running like all fate runs out. When i get conered in to a dead end the bear slowly and quitely gets closer. As i can only see its red eyes the bear starts to strike and strike. And keep on striking as my whole body was being ripped to little lines. Oh no ! it was only a dream i wake up bullets run down my chest. It was morning time my dog lil biter runs. Making sure everything was ok then a cat jumps into my window. As llittle biters quickly to protect me then the cat strikes and miss. So then then my dog attacks the cat the cat runs behind me. My dog jumps on me and scratches me on my face with his paw as the cat is behind. Me the cat strikes and srcatches me to as i start to bleed out my eye the cat runs. Out the window. The dog tries to see if im ok my dog starts to howl. Mom comes to see what tthe howling is about then she rushes me to the hospitle the doctor said nothing a litte stitches can't fixes i got my stitch then left with the marks of cat and dog war on my face so now i no never stand in themiddle of cat in dog fight.

Ksaun- I like your story. I like how you started with the dream which helped to get the readers attention. You also have good description here. You can definitely work on some punctuation things here. There are not many periods in the whole paragraph. We can work on this. To start, think about placing periods where you would stop when you are talking. For example "today i was walking down the street alone (.) Then continue...

one day i set out to play baseball for my pony league team. I had two games in one day a double hitter and it was 89'. i pitch 4 endings and and it was against the best team green field. Witch has a team fool of good hitters. So after i got done pitching i had to go to the out field so brian brown went to the mond to pitch i wasnt wasnt one of my best days out there. I had throw 2/3 people out that game with out getting any water because i think i didnt desever it. Because we lost that game extra ends 15 to 18. After that game we played north braddock and i started off at short stop. Everything was coming my way. And i was stoping everything that was coming to me and i was loving it after that it was are turn to hit first time up they had they best pitcher up i hit a double and brian was up next he hit a triple running me in. And we won that game 12 to 10 then after that we got hugs and hot hot dogs. GOod job so far Ksaun. I think you should work a little more on these two games. You could talk about how you felt about the way you played in the first game. Did the second game make you feel better about the first game. YOu can talk about how you went to the courts afterward, but you have to spend a little bit more time on this first. Does this make sense?

And evey one went to the b-ball court butt i went home to get my shoesbecause i only lived up the street from turner so i com back down everyone got there team and i come up last on the team with te twin that played on my team we lost the two on two tourment we went 1/2 after that i went home because i wasnt feeling so good.so when i gt home i had to throw up and just. Ketp doing it so i was trying to go to sleep i couldnt go to sleep so i kept try and kept throwing up so i just went to sleep in the tub.

i think Bow wow is a ﻿ influential rap to our society because. he was only 13 when everybody thought Bow Wow was a veteran. At age 6 the bow wow made his first stage appearance on the Chronic Tour and when he was on tour he goit snopp doggs attention.that hw he gt the name lil bow wow. He started off as a young rapper and actor at 13. He droped is first ablum and after that he made his first aperance in the movie all about the bejamins in 2002. And in the following year he stared his own movie like mike. Bow wow also played in the movie fast to farious tokyo drift. but of right now sence 2011 during new years on bet bow wow got signed with baby's and lil waynes recoreds. ymcmb witch means young money cash money billionar still making ablums and under ground rcorded and making remixes. To other song and letting everyone knowing he can rap just as good as any other rapper. And just because he's young it doesn't mean nothing becuase. He's one of the youngest rapper to be in the one of the best groups. And he still does stuff for the youth. As a older person and still living life and wanting other people to do the same just because. You get older no thing you do doesn't have to change and not everything has to change as you get older. And life and this is why i like bow wow music and is movies and other stuff.

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my house is very big on the outside it has a rollicoaster around the house and a food spaul outside. and the garege it has a virual car setting u know the name of the car you got the car and the inside the living room there a pool slide that takes you to and a hd flat screen that is 104" and have a tea bar and a grill food place that dosent have smoke and i have a game zone for called a war zone for its a shooting range a bb ,paint ball water gun and air gun war zone and a virtual game setting that putts you in the game plus it

technology is good progress because we can we can now talk to year friend all over the world with internet and phones and phone and be middle why doing it at the say time .Plus its good to the army to because it has help them go home 2 there familys from enimme radars and tracking devices and weapos with etra gear 2 help them stay alive. And

K'SAUN MATTOX
=//in school thinking about if ima pass or not.//= =//Wondering if ima make to high school maybe even college when bell rings time to go home.//= =//Last period as im still thinking why in walking home. I get home time to clean up after 3 kids soon to be 4 wonder if its a chore or the job of a black slave.//= =//Who has it worst me or the guy on 8 mile still living in your moms house about the age of 19 .//= =//Whos go's by the nickname of rabbit who can take dat serously.//= = =